I've been experimenting with short story writing style and have rewritten the 'Tale of Yesterday' in the previous but one posting, in the third person, to see what difference it creates. Apart from blog post writing I haven't published any stories and poems, which are mostly based on personal experiences, like many a writer! Now, if anyone, has thoughts, I ask for an honest crit, warts and all! It'sabout 1030 words in length. Read aloud as a voice tells a story differently than if one reads silently.
I found the exercise useful as it allowed the play of more descriptive passages. I seem to have spent many hours writing but I enjoy it. As the wrist is now caput after mowing a lawn, and lifting a basket of very wet grass from the mower as it caught awkwardly and lifting one end of a heavy sofa I've found the simplest of tasks that the right hand is required to do impossible! However, I can support it on the table as I type! It is strapped! Annoyingly, it won't let me play the piano!
Walking on a Wild Side of France 2
A Tale of Yesterday
They were blessed with weather that was not wet, windy, hot, cold, blue-skied
or cloudy, though a few mackerel clouds had started to form as sunset
approached. They were energised as they came to the end of a journey! It
had been an exhilarating fast walk, lasting about two hours, trudging through
Autumn leaves with muddy puddles to skirt around, along a route, part of which
she had experienced about 6 years ago with a French walking group, and part of
which was new to her.
She loves the circular walks from
her house along roads and grassy footpaths, down into the valley, along by the
river, weirs and old water mills, high on a cliff ridge, or out on the
agricultural plain surrounding woodland and ponds. Here she can abide
with nature, she can wonder at tumbledown stone ruins or stone buildings still
in use. She can wander along ancient walls man-made with stone where moss
and fern are prolific. She can smell ancient stones and marvel at the decay of
leaves, fungi and trees. In a different season her heart jumps with joy
as birds on the wing sing songs to her whilst they flutter in the coming of
Spring. However, just a few days ago, requiring adventure and
stimulus, she considered exploring regions further from her house, which would
mean driving the car to starting points where other circular walks could be
tested!
Finding a suitable GR track with a signpost, she parked her car on the
verge. Down the narrowing track they set their matching pace scuffing the
beautiful autumn-coloured oak leaves, aware of the river on their left, yet a
field or so away. They were
walking downhill on rocks and slippery moss, keen to reach a safe vantage,
concerned to be out of the way of what they at first heard, then
witnessed. She was worried that the car would uncontrollably slide into
them. An old man had given up trying to rev his squealing old French car
up a leafy, slippery-wet slope and had parked in an unlikely place on a track
parallel to the rushing river. Now, he was getting out of his
vehicle. It was comforting to be
with a friend where emerging out of a leafy tunnel of trees, they hadn't seen a
soul. It is unusual to meet anyone on a walk in the wilderness of France
but she had observed that unwanted thoughts creep into her mind when walking in
woodland!
In the same sentence, acknowledging "Bonjour", he said it was
beautiful weather and asked if they were afraid, to which she replied
"NON". But as he started to walk uphill she asked
"Pourquoi?" Ah, he
voiced, hadn't they read or seen information concerning the fact that there
might be aggressive persons about! How spooky and such a strange
thing for anyone to say! Confidently, she affirmed that they were ok and
dismissed the subject to enquire if it was his intention to drive
uphill, but she couldn't understand what he muttered in his Gallic
language. It wasn't important. He seemed harmless!
"Bon Journée, Au revoir."
They set off in the opposite direction to continue their exploratory walk,
still with the river rushing on the left, and came alongside an escalade; a
rock climbing exercise site! This part she remembered from the only time
she had ever walked this way, when she had welcomed the shade of the glade in
an extremely hot summer!
Out into open fields, yet following the river, with a field distance between
them and it. Here they walked
along a very straight track, waymarked white bar over a red bar. There was a person approaching, walking
alongside his horse!
"Had they seen a boxer dog?"
"NON".
Later, when they came to a junction they looked back and saw him riding the
horse in the distance. They wondered how he would find his dog in such a remote
area! They wandered around the bend confident that the track was not the way.
"What's that?"
Fortunately, whilst standing on the sidetrack locating their position on the
map they were away from danger. They'd heard a rushing of hooves. The horse
without a rider galloped round the corner and into a wooded area. Crazy
horse! Had he thrown his rider? With no sign of a human being they
continued on their travels, for what could they do? Whereupon, after
several minutes, a man could be heard running behind them and was out of
breath. He told them that the horse had bolted, afraid of beefy red Limousin
cattle, which were processing up a different hill on the other side of the
field. On he ran. They followed in the wake of the unseated rider, in the path
of the galloping horse, to turn right onto a muddy, puddled, leaf-strewn
chemin, through different woodland with a sign to say it was a refuge for
pheasants. Could they read? Here, her observant friend took note
that the horse had come this way as there were recent horse-shoe shapes slewed
on the grassy track, and later, fresh horse poo! They wondered if the rider ever found his horse and
dog!! What a day for HIM... and THEM!
Tracking the map, her friend was intelligent enough to realise that where she
thought they were was incorrect! She was glad that someone was not
relying on her because lazily, she hadn't extricated her reading glasses from
her bag! This made quite a difference to reading a map! River, woodland, power wires, randonnée
signs indicated their map location. If that is the lilac route, then this
must be the pale yellow route and so it was that they emerged by the car having
walked in an elliptical route.
Home to delicious scones baked earlier that day, served with home-made
mirabelle jelly, crème fraîche instead of butter and refreshingly hot 'Earl's
Passion' tea in white porcelain cups. How civilised, as they discussed
many things, even remembering the life and death of her friend’s mother and the
life and death of her uncle.
Today: Remembrance Sunday.